A Difficult Dead End :: CR99 220620

Inspired by Charli Mill’s Carrot Ranch, #99WordStories
In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about “The Feeling of Freedom“.

It’s hard, getting this far and hitting a dead end.

We invested a lot you and I and we reached some summits.

We both gave more than we ever expected but looking back, so much of it made no difference.

We don’t know how to forgive or fix but only how to finish.

I’m ashamed that our home is not big enough to hide from each other.

The papers are on the table. Sign and give them to Monica. She agreed to be our go-between.

The only freedom I can see for us now – is life without the other.

A-couple-during-sunset-by RJ-pixahive

Photo credit: RJ via Pixahive

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19 thoughts on “A Difficult Dead End :: CR99 220620

  1. This is rather sad but sometimes better for those involved. This reminds me of my daughter who married her college boyfriend. It did not turn out well and she stayed with him for way too long making the end of the marriage more difficult. What an emotional roller coaster, but my daughter is like a new woman and is so much happier now. Seeing her enjoying life now is night and day difference! I’m so proud she saw it through to the bitter end. We are all happier now! 😊

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    1. A rough ride indeed. I glad your daughter made her way to a better life – but I’ll bet it was painful. And for her mom – I KNOW it was painful to watch because there is only so much that can be done by anyone – even a loving parent.

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  2. Sad, yes, but being the child of divorced parents, they both went on to better lives, even if it meant heartbreak for all of us. However, I’m aware that breakups don’t always lead to a better future.
    Nicely put together for this week’s theme, Gary.


    1. Hi Hugh. My parents had a rough patch when I was about 10 years old and well recall the panic I felt one night when my dad took me aside and “warned” me that I might have to decide which of my parents I wanted to live with. He did not try to influence me one way or the other but just looked more in pain than I’d ever seen him. Thankfully they sorted things out and decided that our family was worth trying to save and that was almost the last I heard of their near-divorce. Now, as adults, we know more of the story and it really did sound much like young 30-year olds trying to sort out a struggling marriage where both were making mistakes.
      It all looks so weird from my 67 year old perspective, but I count my sisters and I as being blessed to have had such parents who found a way to make their marriage work.
      Thanks for reading my quick story ad engaging the issue.
      I know we all have our struggles and yours are way out side of my experience, but I have to say that I admire the man they helped turn you into.

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      1. Thanks, Gary.

        I remember my father’s words clearly when my parents told my sister and me they were separating. “Your mother doesn’t love me anymore.” Those were the most challenging words I’ve ever had to take in (so far).


      2. ugh – Hugh. I recall my own version of your story. Pretty scary as a kid, when your whole world seems to be falling apart. Sorry for getting so far behind on my followup. I’m always thankful for your visits and conversation.

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  3. This story is full of emotion even with as few words as you use! This is my fav line, “I’m ashamed that our home is not big enough to hide from each other.” It is also a pivot for me in my own head about what would the outcome be if the house was big enough for them to hide from one another. What if that warranted a separation and then a reconciliation? That is what I love about flash…the questions that stay with you. Thank you for sharing!

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    1. Hi Tammy & thanks for checking out this story. Yea – lots of hard emotions in this situation. I was surprised by how detailed flash fiction could get then by my own success at producing it

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    1. Yea – sad but true. This was on my mind lately as I just learned that a cousin had to abandon her marriage. A single son from it was grown, married and out of the house so she was spared doing this with a child, but still – hard – very hard. Thanks always for reading my work.


    1. Hi D. Yes, I wanted to see if I could establish that tone in so few words. I’ve know so many couples who marriages failed despite them trying. From the outside looking in, it is so easy to judge but I bet until you’re there yourself, it may be even harder to see a situation through the eyes of the people who are in it. Thanks for giving it a read 🙂


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