Far From Prison :: CR99 220517

Inspired by Charli Mill’s Carrot Ranch, #99WordStories
In 99 words (no more, no less) rewrite a longer story
 

“Buttercup?”

The soldier, veteran and just-released felon met the dog’s eyes. “How are you here?”

Expecting a small town far from prison, the bus had left him at the midnight neon lights of this dusty gas station surrounded by corn fields.

Apparently – this is the town.

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A pickup had pulled in. Buttercup jumped out on seeing him.

He knelt, “Come here girl – there.” He’d trained her for the Dogs for Veterans project in prison.

Her owner, with prosthetic legs and a captain’s insignia jacket approached.

He instinctively stood and saluted.

“At ease. Soldier—how do you know my dog?”


 

At best, my article above is a synopsis of a story by Charli Mills who runs the Carrot Ranch 99-word story project.  For the month of May, she also published a story to a different blog project known as, Story Chat, by Marsha Ingrao. That story stimulated lots of comments as readers consumed and then discussed the story from the comment section of the link I shared above. She then chose to have us rewrite her longer story in 99 words.

My work above is not a unique story but just a very much shorter version of Charli’ great work.  I hope you enjoy both her story at the link above then my shorter synopsis-scale version.


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11 thoughts on “Far From Prison :: CR99 220517

    1. Thanks Hugh,
      Frankly I didn’t think I would be able to make this work and as it is, I felt like I was crushing a perfectly good story and squeezing out all the good stuff.
      But it did come out better than I expected. Thanks for looking at both her and my efforts on this one.

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  1. I’m glad you pulled this off, Gary, and are happy with what you accomplished. I use Charli’s formula each month when I write the Story Chat Summary. It helps me clarify what the topics are. Thanks again for all your comments on Story Chat.

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